this week's story: "Perfection in the Work" by KindKit

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I kind of agonized over which story to submit for critique, but in the end I decided on the due South story that I'm proudest of. My reasoning being that I don't need people telling me about the story flaws I can see already, but about the ones I don't notice.

I'm still pretty new to the fandom, and I suppose my main worry in fic is getting the characters' voices right. Especially Fraser's--I haven't dared attempt his POV yet. So comments about the voices and how to improve them, in both dialogue and narration, would be particularly welcome.

Anyway, here's the story: Perfection in the Work, Fraser/Kowalski, rated R.

ETA: This week's moderator is gurrier, gurrier @ comcast.net.

Comments

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I didn't get a chance to actually comment on this while it was up for review--but I wanted to tell you, better late than never, that I thought this was a gorgeous, gorgeous piece. I loved the descriptions of Inuvik, and Ray's voice was spot-on. As was Fraser's, for that matter! At least to my ears. :) I admit I was a bit sceptical about Ray being a gardener--but you made it work, I think. It was a refreshing change from the "Ray moves to Canada and becomes a mechanic" trope.
So, to sum up: lovely job! :)