ds_workshop | Summary: "Knowing Me, Knowing You" by china

(Updated and reposted, because I couldn't edit the original one. Weird!)

Thanks to everybody who participated in the discussion! New story coming up tomorrow.

zebra363 didn't really believe RayV's attraction to RayK, saying that she needs convincing for this pairing, and that didn't quite happen here. She liked the short segments, but felt the transition to kissing was too abrupt, supporting

china_shop's suspicion that she didn't linger enough for the tension to build.

china_shop felt that relying on the readers' investment in a pairing is one of her weaknesses

zebra363 wondered about the sentence "Ray had liked Stevie, liked her a lot, which meant he’d never gotten to know her." She decided this meant there were things about Stevie RayV would have disliked if he'd gotten to know her, rather than implying that it isn't possible to like anyone you know well!

china_shop said it was supposed to be about Ray not being in a position to trust anyone in Vegas, because opening himself up would be dangerous.

zebra363 could see that interpretation, but thought the line "Ninety percent of the nice guys—and girls—in Vegas were cons" backed up her reading.

china_shop responded: "It's more that the dangers were present and the stakes were high, than he was *sure* she was a con." She wondered if a slight rephrasing of the preceding sentence would have made this meaning clearer.

kijikun liked Ray's voice and the end of the fic. She thought the ambiguity around Stevie's gender when she was first mentioned was cool, but wished it had lasted longer. She also wanted more detail about RayV's visits to the psychiatrist.

china_shop agreed that she might have missed some opportunities to delve deeper.