this week's story: "Perfection in the Work" by KindKit

[kindkit.livejournal.com]

I kind of agonized over which story to submit for critique, but in the end I decided on the due South story that I'm proudest of. My reasoning being that I don't need people telling me about the story flaws I can see already, but about the ones I don't notice.

I'm still pretty new to the fandom, and I suppose my main worry in fic is getting the characters' voices right. Especially Fraser's--I haven't dared attempt his POV yet. So comments about the voices and how to improve them, in both dialogue and narration, would be particularly welcome.

Anyway, here's the story: Perfection in the Work, Fraser/Kowalski, rated R.

ETA: This week's moderator is gurrier, gurrier @ comcast.net.

Comments

[akite.livejournal.com]

Well, you didn't give us much to bitch about, that's for sure. I can see this Ray. No way would he like being considered as Fraser's wife. *g* No way would he just sit at the cabin waiting for Fraser to come home, either. Ray would be out doing things, and you can just bet he learns how to can.

[kindkit.livejournal.com]

you can just bet he learns how to can

I hope so! He and Rosemary could take about little!Fraser. And come winter, Ray could use his canned tomatoes on homemade pizzas. *grins*