ds_workshop | this week's story: "In the Water" by gurrier

To get the ball rolling, I'm submitting a story of mine called In the Water.

Due South is the first fandom I've ever written in, and the first time I've written fiction since leaving school nearly 20 years ago. That's a long time without worrying about plot, structure, characterisation - anything! People have said nice things, which feels really good, but I'm left wondering. What didn't work? What could I do better? So i'd really appreciate some critical feedback.

This week's moderator is

sprat, sprat75@gmail.com.

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He's probably perfectly capable of looking clueless, if he thought the situation warranted it (as a protection for himself?).

Yeah, I picture Fraser doing clueless as protection, even with Ray. Maybe especially with Ray, as there's more emotional risk for him?

one big hand on Ray's hip, pulling him close. Hips, mmm mmm!

Everything about Ray is sexy! Fraser's a bit too pretty for my taste most of the time, but I do love his hands.

this week's story: "In the Water" by gurrier

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